A Day at the Beach

Jen dove through the surf, then floated beyond the break, arms and legs akimbo, face to the sky, water filling her ears. She couldn’t see the pandemonium; she couldn’t hear the warning. “Shark!”

This weekend’s Trifecta Challenge is to write a story or snippet of a story which includes, in exactly 33 words, a justified exclamation point.


24 thoughts on “A Day at the Beach

    1. I once watched a nurse shark watching a swimmer out beyond the surf. A nurse shark is a relatively harmless shark, but a shark nonetheless. I afraid Jen, bobbing on the surface, will be unwitting prey. I always enjoy your comments Jester–Thanks.

  1. Very nice indeed. I see Jester has given Jen the power to run on water…I hope she does it! I love the relaxed, languid description of what was an idyllic scene building up to the final desperate warning cry. Hope to see you for the weekday challenge too.

  2. And with such a little amount of words you’ve managed to instil angst in anxiety in me! Great piece! Did I mention I now can’t get the Jaws music out of my head? 🙂

  3. Living on the central coast of California, I hear about shark sightings fairly often.
    Nicely done and very appropriate.

    1. Diane~Sharks on the California north coast are serious. They like surfers in those seal-like wet suits. Thanks for the encouragement. I hope to see your writing at a Trifecta challenge.

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